Due to the international financial crisis, Iceland is at the edge of a national bankrupt. Last week the government saved the banks Glitnir and Landsbanki, the third and second largest bank of Iceland. The Icelandic government has also introduced a ‘trading-stop’ to several other banks and since the economy particularly depends on the banking sector, Iceland stands for some important en historical days that could influence the future of the country.
Due to the international financial crisis, Iceland is at the edge of a national bankrupt [voc: bankruptcy]. Last week the government saved the banks Glitnir and Landsbanki, the third and second largest bank of Iceland. The Icelandic government has also introduced a ‘trading-stop’ to ['for' i.p.v. 'to'] several other banks and [start a new sentence] since the economy particularly depends on the banking sector, Iceland stands for ['is faced with'] some important en [and] historical ['historic' i.p.v. 'historical'] days that could influence the future of the country.
You have 3 sentences instead of 4. Good topic sentence and good flow.
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Due to the international financial crisis, Iceland is at the edge of a national bankrupt [voc: bankruptcy]. Last week the government saved the banks Glitnir and Landsbanki, the third and second largest bank of Iceland. The Icelandic government has also introduced a ‘trading-stop’ to ['for' i.p.v. 'to'] several other banks and [start a new sentence] since the economy particularly depends on the banking sector, Iceland stands for ['is faced with'] some important en [and] historical ['historic' i.p.v. 'historical'] days that could influence the future of the country.
You have 3 sentences instead of 4. Good topic sentence and good flow.
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